I am definately a novice poet. When we study poetry with students. They love it, I not sure I do, I am reflecting on why....
Thanks for reading!
Stepping
into the lane
shortest line
food on the belt
one by one
An older gentleman
White hair
Blue hat
She Smiled
He Smiled
Sifting Counting
He Pays
Small to Large
Reflection, Aging, joking
Warm thoughts of not forgetting
Memories
All alone
Thanks, Crystal, for taking a risk with this slice. I could really visualize this scene. My favorite lines were "White hair/ Blue hat/ She Smiled/ He Smiled" because of the contrast. I also like that you chose to capitalize "Smiled." I hope you try another poem before the month is over!
ReplyDeleteThree years ago when I took on my first challenge I found my voice in poetry. I love the short way to say something big and leave people filling in the details. This is exactly what I found in your poem.
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